Anatomy of Story Collaboration (SPOILER ALERT)
This is one of my favorite pages from my comic The Army of Dr. Moreau #4, even though half of the page was never in the original script. In the initial script, only the second and fourth panels were in the story. Since the beginning, I’ve given Carl Sciacchitano (the artist) as much creative freedom as possible. While doing layouts for this issue, he expanded the sequence from the previous page, and carried part of the action over to the next page. At the same time, he included two new panels, the first and the third, which he felt added a bit more character to the story and resonance to the death of McNally (I told you there were spoilers). He ran all of this by me before fully committing to drawing it, and I agreed with his choices. The problem was the dialog for the first and third panel didn’t exist, because neither had been in the original script. Writing dialog for the first panel was no problem, but the third panel was difficult, especially because the original dialog for the second panel had been meant to end the scene. Honestly, I wrote at least three versions of that third panel, which when you really study it, is a scene in and of itself. All the earliest dialog was garbage—it merely reinforced the action. “Got get this grave dug.” “Make sure you get the rest of his ammo.” That sort of stuff. Carl felt there needed to be more to this scene, and he drew it, but I was at a loss for how to give it more character. Then it struck me—I needed to have the characters say what they were thinking. By changing the dialog to something connected to what they were thinking, as opposed to what they were doing, I could give more life to Hadley and Beckett. This led me to change the dialog in the second panel, which had already been written, but needed a change of tone and meaning, and helped to shape the dialog of the fourth panel. This issue, and the overall story is much better, thanks to the collaboration with Carl. The Army of Dr. Moreau is published digitally by Monkeybrain Comics, and is available exclusively through Comixology.

Anatomy of Story Collaboration (SPOILER ALERT)

This is one of my favorite pages from my comic The Army of Dr. Moreau #4, even though half of the page was never in the original script. In the initial script, only the second and fourth panels were in the story. Since the beginning, I’ve given Carl Sciacchitano (the artist) as much creative freedom as possible. While doing layouts for this issue, he expanded the sequence from the previous page, and carried part of the action over to the next page. At the same time, he included two new panels, the first and the third, which he felt added a bit more character to the story and resonance to the death of McNally (I told you there were spoilers). He ran all of this by me before fully committing to drawing it, and I agreed with his choices. The problem was the dialog for the first and third panel didn’t exist, because neither had been in the original script. Writing dialog for the first panel was no problem, but the third panel was difficult, especially because the original dialog for the second panel had been meant to end the scene. Honestly, I wrote at least three versions of that third panel, which when you really study it, is a scene in and of itself. All the earliest dialog was garbage—it merely reinforced the action. “Got get this grave dug.” “Make sure you get the rest of his ammo.” That sort of stuff. Carl felt there needed to be more to this scene, and he drew it, but I was at a loss for how to give it more character. Then it struck me—I needed to have the characters say what they were thinking. By changing the dialog to something connected to what they were thinking, as opposed to what they were doing, I could give more life to Hadley and Beckett. This led me to change the dialog in the second panel, which had already been written, but needed a change of tone and meaning, and helped to shape the dialog of the fourth panel. This issue, and the overall story is much better, thanks to the collaboration with Carl. The Army of Dr. Moreau is published digitally by Monkeybrain Comics, and is available exclusively through Comixology.

The Army of Dr. Moreau #1. Available from Monkeybrain Comics on Comixology for only 99 cents. https://www.comixology.com/The-Army-of-Dr-Moreau-1/digital-comic/48525

Here’s a preview of The Army of Dr. Moreau #4, written by David F. Walker, art by Carl Sciacchitano, colors by Sara Machjewski. The Army of Dr. Moreau #4 comes out April 2nd from Monkeybrain Comics through Comixology. Pre-order your copy now!!!

Here’s a preview of The Army of Dr. Moreau #4, written by David F. Walker, art by Carl Sciacchitano, colors by Sara Machjewski. The Army of Dr. Moreau #4 comes out April 2nd from Monkeybrain Comics through Comixology. Pre-order your copy now!!!

Here’s a preview of the first page of The Army of Dr. Moreau #4, written by David F. Walker, art by Carl Sciacchitano, colors by Sara Machjewski. The Army of Dr. Moreau #4 comes out April 2nd from Monkeybrain Comics through Comixology. Pre-order your copy now!!!

Evolution of a panel - The Army of Dr. Moreau #4, written by David F. Walker, art by Carl Sciacchitano, colors by Sara Machjewski. The Army of Dr. Moreau #4 comes out April 2nd from Monkeybrain Comics through Comixology. Pre-order your copy now!!!

Evolution of a panel - The Army of Dr. Moreau #4, written by David F. Walker, art by Carl Sciacchitano, colors by Sara Machjewski. The Army of Dr. Moreau #4 comes out April 2nd from Monkeybrain Comics through Comixology. Pre-order your copy now!!!

An advance look at The Army of Dr. Moreau #4, due out next month from Monkeybrain Comics through Comixology. The Army of Dr. Moreau #1-3 are available for 99 cents each. https://www.comixology.com/The-Army-of-Dr-Moreau-1/digital-comic/48525

An advance look at The Army of Dr. Moreau #4, due out next month from Monkeybrain Comics through Comixology. The Army of Dr. Moreau #1-3 are available for 99 cents each. https://www.comixology.com/The-Army-of-Dr-Moreau-1/digital-comic/48525

For those of you that couldn’t afford the 99 cents it cost to buy the first issue of THE ARMY OF DR. MOREAU, it is now available for free as part of 10-issue pack from Monkeybrain Comics and Comixology. Enter code SXMBRAIN http://t.co/k4arC01a1V

For those of you that couldn’t afford the 99 cents it cost to buy the first issue of THE ARMY OF DR. MOREAU, it is now available for free as part of 10-issue pack from Monkeybrain Comics and Comixology. Enter code SXMBRAIN http://t.co/k4arC01a1V

Evolution of a panel - The Army of Dr. Moreau #1 now available from Monkeybrain Comics through Comixology. Written by David F. Walker, art by Carl Sciacchitano, colored by Sara Machajewski. On sale for 99 cents.

Evolution of a panel - The Army of Dr. Moreau #1 now available from Monkeybrain Comics through Comixology. Written by David F. Walker, art by Carl Sciacchitano, colored by Sara Machajewski. On sale for 99 cents.

Evolution of a panel - The Army of Dr. Moreau #2 now available from Monkeybrain Comics through Comixology. Written by David F. Walker, art by Carl Sciacchitano, colored by Sara Machajewski.

Evolution of a panel - The Army of Dr. Moreau #2 now available from Monkeybrain Comics through Comixology. Written by David F. Walker, art by Carl Sciacchitano, colored by Sara Machajewski.

Evolution of a panel - The Army of Dr. Moreau #3 now available from Monkeybrain Comics through Comixology. Written by David F. Walker, art by Carl Sciacchitano, colored by Sara Machajewski.

Evolution of a panel - The Army of Dr. Moreau #3 now available from Monkeybrain Comics through Comixology. Written by David F. Walker, art by Carl Sciacchitano, colored by Sara Machajewski.